Shots are well done, VO is well done, we just need to work on the timing and the script a little more. I think the opening lines need to be adjusted. Stating that the earth has X amount of water doesn't really match well with what your message is. Is that fact necessary? The same thing applies to your salt water vs. fresh water fact. I think it's best to maybe use a fact about how much water is used globally each year and how we are expected to need more as time goes on. I like the idea of showing the water level drop and using the graphic of the year it represents is good. But the years have to match the script. You mentioned 2025 as a year in the script but 2025 is not marked on the glass. I think instead of a shot from the bottom of the glass, try taking a shot from the top of the glass with the water falling down into it. The shot from underneath is a little confusing and I don't get it right away that it's a shot from below. You also need to try and not spill water on the side of the glass as you pour it in. I like the ti leaves on the table. That gives it more color. Good first draft but lets keep working to go from good to great!
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