In your TIAS you mentioned that one person would be a pest to the others. I don't see that in your script. I see that person saying she doesn't want to study but how is she a pest? They should be in the lab, the test has started, and she's doing all sorts of annoying things. The way you have it now doesn't match your original plan. 2 points out of 4
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